GiveAway: Set of Eneloop batteries!!

Could be improved with, It was a dark and stormy night when Sanyo……………….

4AA

Actually, in this case, the literal reading of that sentence would be, “… 70% of it is full capacity…”, so no apostrophe at all would be appropriate. (“… 70% of its full capacity…”) <<<- oops, Pete7874 got that way before me. And I can’t make strikethrough work, so y’all will have to read it again.

But my actual contribution is from the limited editions page:
_Some people used to write something (like a letter or a number) on each battery to know what batteries belonged together.
Because it is not recommended to mix old with new batteries, because this can result in a damaged (reverse-charged) battery! With The limited edition you don`t have to do this anymore. Just put the same colors or designs together with a certain device! Especially Photographers have been happy with the ltd editions.
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I’d write it as this:
Some people used to write something (like a letter or a number) on each battery to know what batteries belonged together.
This is done because it is not recommended to mix old with new batteries, because this can result in a damaged (reverse-charged) battery! With the limited edition, you don’t have to do this anymore. Just put the same colors or designs together with a certain device! Photographers in particular have been happy with the limited editions.

This is a great project you’ve put together. Double A batteries please, if I’m so lucky.

http://eneloop101.com/about-me/ edits in BOLD (AA for me please!)

So I wanted to build an "in-depth" website about eneloops for a long-long time, a place for sharing my knowledge and providing info about almost anything you can think of, about these fantastic batteries, including catalogs, images, test results, background info, know-hows, overviews, history, detailed information etc, for eneloop users and collectors.

This website should be a place to learn and get the right information, from the right source.

After moving back to the Netherlands -where I currently live- I decided to get this project going.

On first page you have: ‘the top in the NiMH battery industry till this day’. Not wrong, but the more usual expression is ‘to this day’.

On the same page ‘In 2009 limited they also produced a Tones edition’. Not even sure what you’re trying to say, but ‘limited’ is out of place, maybe ‘in 2009 they also produced a limited Tones edition’? I also see later on you use ‘tones’ in lowercase, it might be good to settle on one spelling.

Then ‘their first Low capacity version, (for low-drain devices)’. Comma should go after parentheses rather than before.

‘In the same year Sanyo officially became a Panasonic company’. Not wrong but just ‘the same year’ sounds better than ‘in the same year’. Besides, the previous sentence starts the same, so you could maybe say ‘also the same year’. The better tense is ‘has become’.

In fake eneloops: ‘Some are more obvious then others.’ Should be ‘than’, not ‘then’.

The picture in the Special edition batteries is much too small, and when you click it it doesn’t get any larger. What’s the point of clicking it if it shows the same thing?

‘many kinds of wrappers ’. You have extra   spaces around ‘wrappers’ and in other places, you probably should remove all of them. It also needs a comma after.

In chargers, ‘Both, Sanyo and Panasonic made some interesting chargers.’ No comma after ‘both’. Tense is also wrong, should rather be ‘are making’ or ‘have been making’.

‘not all of their chargers are good’. Missing period.

‘Some of them charge a pair of batteries for X amount of hours’ This is a continuation of the previous idea, should be the same paragraph.

‘Some products like the mobile boosters were improved and sold under the Panasonic brand.’ Tense is not great, should rather be ‘have been improved and sold’.

For special names sometimes you use bold, sometimes backquotes, sometimes double quotes, it would be good to have a more uniform styling.

Your links are sometimes bold sometimes not, I don’t see a rule.

AA please. Thanks.

I am not English speaker so my help in finding and correcting grammar and others would not be helpful.

I suggest to add more info/specs/datasheets and photos of the non-batteries eneloop products such as the eneloop kairo warmers… eneloop stick boosters… powerbanks… chargers… solar aa chargers and the many other eneloop branded products.

I really need 4xAA.

Thanks for the chance and good luck to all…

Please sir.

I just finished the latest changes in order of suggestions.

Thanks for all the help.

I know I should be more consistent. The bold links on the main page are especially for the most important links. The smaller , non-bold links are not for the main pages so to say.
Thanks for all the feedback. I will try and look for more product sheets, but that`s becoming harder and harder to find.

“You get to know everything about Eneloops”
I would change to Everything you want to know about Eneloop batteries

I would like 4AA batteries.

Oh and the fake eneloop is hilarious, i just have to repost it here for comedic value

Hehehe.

Thanks Bort.

A few more days before I finish the giveaway. Please join when you can.

2nd paragraph, 1st sentence…

Eneloop batteries were first introduced in November 2005 by Sanyo Japan.

Is “Sanyo Japan” the actual company name or should it read in Japan by Sanyo??

Great site. Kudos for all your efforts.

BTW, AAA size for me if this qualifies.

Be careful they are also more prone to damage the battery jacket!

better to say, Be careful, these battery jackets are easier to damage !

AA for me.

chibi do you sell c or d eneloops ?

In the About/Contact,

Anyhow, as I began to learn more about eneloops the more I started collecting information from different sources.

Should be:
Anyway, as I began to learn more about Eneloops, I started collecting information from various sources.

4AAA, :slight_smile:

3.

As my natal language is Spanish, I only can suggest things To add.

Why dont you open An online store “attached” To your web for selling eneloop batteries directly from Japan??? Especial editions and so on?

That would be great!

(It is only a suggestion)

4xAA

Thanks

Hey Fran. Just wanted to chime in that I don't live in Japan anymore so I can't help with that! Currently living in the Netherlands.

Thanks guys for posting. I will probably add the suggestions tomorrow.

Count me in please. AAs…

:wink:

Was going to stop the giveaway tonight, but I'm too tired. So I'll give at least another 24-hours. Probably 48 hours.

Just visit the eneloop101.com website and find a mistake, or tell me what to add.

I don’t know if this is relevant or not but I’m pointing it out anyway.

In the FAQ page you’ve metioned about LSD cells like this

Not the case entirely, to overcome the self discharge problem, along with high quality materials Eneloop used an improved electrode separator and improved positive electrode. So the LSD was achieved not just by using higher quality materials but by also adopting an improved manufacturing design.

According to Panasonic they are using a new superlattice alloy to reduce the chemical decomposition of the cathode and to increase the electrical capacity of the battery and reduce the internal resistance.

From the “Eneloop Products” page

My corrections after the cross-outs in parentheses (s/b “new word or phrase”)
s/b = should be

I didn’t correct the titles but most of them need attention. Generally speaking every word in a title should start with a capital letter. For example, the second product’s title is “Portable air cleaner” but it should probably be “Portable Air Cleaner”.


Eneloop Lamp

Portable interior light

Product code: ENL-Y1S

A rechargeable interior light, when holding 90 degrees turns into (s/b held its light can be directed like) a flashlight. Great for emergencies like earthquakes. Received a design award in 2010.


Portable air cleaner

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Kairo (heater)

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Portable (feet) warmer

Eneloop Anka

Product code: KIR-S4S / KIR-S5S

Safely warms your feet while your’e (s/b you’re) taking a nap or while you’re driving. It will turn off automatically with it’s (s/b its) built-in timer.


Eneloop Lap / Feet warmer

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Neck warmer

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Waist warmer

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Solar Charger

No Corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop LED solar light

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop portable solar charger

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop portable solar charger

Product code: SSL-SBWL3AS

Solar charger that can be folded in half, with a battery built-in to (s/b built into) the 5V USB charger…
This is actually a double version of the one above.


Eneloop battery packs (mobile boosters)

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop stick booster

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop 9V music booster

Product code: KBC-9VS

Rechargeable lithium battery pack of 7350mAh capacity with two outputs of 9V each with a maximum of 2000mA. Used for musical instruments like a Distortion/-Over drive- (s/b Overdrive), Digital delay/Digital reverb etc. Includes a power adapter to use with 100-240V AC.


Eneloop stick booster Nintendo

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Wii remote control charger

Product code: NC-WR01DC

You can place your Nintendo Wii controller in this dock to charge it’s (s/b its) batteries…


Eneloop Wii remote control battery pack

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Wii remote control pack

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop Wii double remote control pack

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop bicycle

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop flashlight

No corrections :slight_smile:


Eneloop solar storage system

No corrections :slight_smile: